Debby,
Thanks for a great start!
Could please make the following touch-ups to polish the wording:
1st page:
- change "Equipment and
Inventory" heading to be just "Equipment"
- change "security" to
"security system"
- under Equipment, add
"read-me sign located beside highway 5 included in the sale (see
photos)"
- delete the extra bullet at
the bottom of the "Equipment" section
- change "partnership with local
Saskatchewan Junior Hockey League" to "partnership
with local Saskatchewan Junior Hockey Team, the Humboldt
Broncos"
- change "all restaurant equipment is part of
the sale" to "all restaurant equipment
and food inventory is included in the
sale"
- delete the point &
sub-points which start: "present manager has been an excellent asset to
the...."
- Please list the price at
$90,000
Please let me know when I may
review the site again.
Take care,
Patti Durand
Mr. Sub, Humboldt
----- Original Message -----
Sent: Saturday, February 28, 2004 4:30
AM
Subject: Mr. Sub (04-0213) Your ad with
www.pin.ca
February 27, 2004
Account Number: 04-0213
Dear Patti Durand,
Greetings, my name is Debby Schlutter. I do all of the web page work
for Pin Services Ltd.
The information for your Mr. Sub
business for sale has now been published to www.pin.ca/sask/04-0213.
Please review the information about your business and let me know if there are any
changes or corrections to be made.
I will be
out of town until Wednesday morning, so unfortunately I can not make any
revisions to your ad unti then.
Also, please REPLY to this email and INCLUDE YOUR ACCOUNT NUMBER in the
SUBJECT field to confirm that we have the correct email address on your
contact page. Please also, to ensure that
any messages you send are not accidently deleted as 'spam', please always use
this format when sending email to me.
I can be reached by email at deb@pin.ca or
by telephone at (250) 744-3558.
Wishing you a Speedy Sale!
-debby schlutter (deb@pin.ca)
Site
Design and Maintenance
PinServices Ltd.
www.pin.ca
